A story on National Public Radio this morning suggested a 1-minute informal writing prompt about the correct placement of modifiers.
THE NPR report was about a 500-pound black bear called Hank the Tank who had broken into more than two dozen homes around South Lake Tahoe, CA, and was responsible for 152 incidents of what the California Department of Fish and Wildlife call “conflict behavior.” Conflict behavior is what the CDFW says happens when a “severely food-habituated bear” like Hank breaks into people’s homes.
The NPR story reported that “the Bear Legacy, a local nonprofit that aims to protect bears, expressed its relief of Hank not being euthanized on Facebook.”
Informal writing prompt
Here’s how to turn that sentence from the NPR news story into an informal writing prompt. First, display and read the sentence:
The Bear Legacy, a local nonprofit that aims to protect bears, expressed its relief of Hank not being euthanized on Facebook.DNA evidence shows Hand the Tank didn’t work alone. By Jonathan Franklin, February 24, 2022, NRP News
Next ask students to identify any parts of the sentence that doesn’t sound right to them. Tell them to write their response in no more than two sentences. Depending on your students’ ages, give them between 30 and 60 seconds to respond.
Depending on their literacy skills, students may notice any, all, or none of these problems:
- The prepositional phrase on Facebook is misplaced. Facebook was where the bear protection group expressed their relief.
- It is unlikely that the California Department of Fish and Wildlife would have posted to Facebook a video of an animal being euthanized or even a photo of a euthanized bear.
- Relief of Hank not being euthanized should be relief that Hank wasn’t euthanized.
Wrap up the informal writing by giving students 30 seconds to write one thing they learned from examining the sentence.
©2022 Linda Gorton Aragoni